Change

Change​

I once knew a sky of blue ​

like your spirit bright​

I once knew a better you ​

spirit changed to night​

Not like nights of shining stars ​

and gleaming moon​

but nights of secret shadows ​

hiding roads to ruin​

I once knew what change could do​

because it took from me a friend​

 

i hear what during saying here dude but i think you should work on the last two lines. they're the weak link in the piece. the rest i like. nice for one so young.

 

swop during for you're ... jeez what did i typr during for?

 

yeh i stuck those last 2 lines in because i was really tired , woke up in the middle of the night had that first part in my head and needed to get it down then wrote some more and wanted to finish cause i was really tired so just kinda scribbled that piece down , will fix it soon though =] thanks for the feedback

peace