its a web , you spin around me, when the heartache is almost gone. its a spell, you cast on me, when I think iam done. I look into your eyes, and they pull me back again then i look inside, and know that i've missed the train. I see you walk out the door with my heart in your hand I give it to you "willingly", or maybe because i cant Am I just a rock to fall on, when everything is lost? Am I just a shoulder to cry on, when all your dreams are tossed? I'll never ask for your affection You know you have mine I pray for the day you are forgotten and I can leave you behind. comments appreciated
My first thought is to edit for proper capitalization. Sometime's it's "I" and others it's "i". I sense the confusion of the narrator, but it results in a confusing poem, as well. It seems to me that there is unrequited love on the part of the narrator, and he wishes he wasn't. The last lline of S2 "I give it to you "willingly", or maybe because i cant" does he give his heart willingly because he has no choice? This is unclear. I like S3.
Yeah, I didn't pay much attention do the capitalization. And if you did sense the confusion, well thats what I was trying to deliver Thanks a lot for your feedback
