unavoidable,again

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by dancingcrazystoned, Jul 11, 2007.

  1. dancingcrazystoned

    dancingcrazystoned Member

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    to be alone

    surrounded by him,not feeling a thing
    not feeling anything

    presented on a platter turned away
    so quickly, before an opinion was ever given,
    a chance was ever recived

    to bear so nakedly, stark with truth
    a foul creation swept into her crevasse
    to forever be present
    but never be there


    [i dont know.i write when i feel sad when i cnat sayt hte things i want to say to the preson i so despratly want to say them to.i always write then read later and feel i've written corny hopeless shit.so this is off the top of my head, tell me whatyou think.please]
     
  2. hoperenefeese

    hoperenefeese Member

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    i like it , it show's what you are feeling at the time in your soul
    the best work is when you have true feelin's about whatver
    and you write them down on paper. those are alway's my best peices
     
  3. dancingcrazystoned

    dancingcrazystoned Member

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    thanks mate..yeh its when you feel stuff...its the constructive way to get it out.and i've never shown them to someone so maybe the net is a good medium to express them??
     
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