alternate reality

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by RexLee, Jul 7, 2007.

  1. RexLee

    RexLee Banned

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    this hollow empty shell, nothing to stop the through
    I lay down early just so I may have time with you

    i wait patiently as the darkness grows,
    and when when the time comes i have seen that you have arose

    you are somthing special, one of a kind,
    extasy fills me when I think of this find

    I cherrish the moments I have you by my side,
    but the love I have for you I must hide

    this alternate reality sets me free,
    I wish I could be here forever, just you and me

    you are perfect in every way from your smile to your eyes,
    but when i awake I am nothing but sobs and crys

    WHy cant you be here with me, I love you so..,
    every breath without you sinks me to my lowest lows

    but as each day passes as it did before,
    I hope you wait for me, because I can wait no more

    as you fade when I awake,
    I will hold off the tears and a smile I fake




    please post any comments or constructive critism for it will be appreciated :)
     
  2. nextGENERATIONhippie

    nextGENERATIONhippie Member

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    i really like your poem keep up the good work
     
  3. RexLee

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    thank you very much
     
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  5. Freakymetalchik

    Freakymetalchik BITCH.

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    wow nice poem :)
     
  6. RexLee

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    thanks, chck out my other one Disconnected
     
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