Man ya gotta give people a hook for why they should read your play. What's it about? Etc..Get em curious.
"{Eugene Slough turns a page of his newspaper, coughs, adjusts his glasses,sips his coffee, glances toward the boy, then resumes his reading} Spirit 1. It's time to decide. Spirit 2.There isn't much time. Daemon 3.Decide for yourself that those two are slim." A bit of quoted insight from the offered work. I did read it and will withhold commenting until I see it more clearly.
My 2 cents. Bold the names of who is speaking and perhaps rethink spacing. Alethea = "Ugliness is the by-product of comparison." I realize you put much thought and effort into your work... I just wanted to help find a way for this to flow as smoothly as the first piece. If I didn't find beauty in your work, I would not comment at all.
