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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by kjhippielove88, Sep 6, 2004.

  1. kjhippielove88

    kjhippielove88 color + rhyme

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    i cant think of a title for this. here it goes

    blank as the white walls that stand before me
    heavy as the world that rests on his shoulders
    deep in the depths of your shadow you will see
    that your heart darkens as the years make you older

    every morning you wake to the face of a stranger
    not remember the night before
    to yourself, you are the ultimate danger
    your lifestyle has become a sickness you cannot ignore

    the mirror of your soul begins to shatter
    and the lines of your life fade
    no longer will you grace the steps of your wooden ladder
    cause now you've been assigned and confined to a cage

    so let the healthy nurse the sick
    and the rich feed the poor
    let the deaf guide the blind
    as we all find what we're looking for
     
  2. Shunununununun

    Shunununununun Member

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    I love it. Maybe a good title is "What we're looking for." or maybe even something much more general, I could only title it from what I think the meaning is or from a segment of the poem though.
     
  3. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

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    I also enjoyed your offering. Perhaps "finding ourselves together" would mirror your meaning.
     

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