100 miles

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Broad_For_Hire, Sep 4, 2004.

  1. Broad_For_Hire

    Broad_For_Hire Member

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    Every step born to burn.
    My path to inhale,
    and fill my lungs.
    Much like my first breath
    when I, myself was born-
    with 100 miles on my mind.

    Now the glamor has withered
    And my skin grows thinner.
    Every chance I can get
    to take another step,
    On the 100 mile march-
    To blackened lungs.

    Finding small comfort
    in the masocistic vision,
    of myself suffering
    from the length of my journey.
    Beginning again,
    Until death comes upon me.
    I will never stop burning
    My last cigarette.
     
  2. wideyed

    wideyed Member

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    i think you should cut the last line off of it, and just leave it "i will never stop burning". i like that line. altho i am a nonsmoker myself. but maybe i'm missing the point entirely.
     
  3. osiris

    osiris Senior Member

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    Reference Denis Leary's No Cure For Cancer. Though I must admit, I find the smoking of Tobacco a deplorably inane concept. All that destruction for so little a buzz. Could never get into it myself.


    Much Love :)
     
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