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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by saffronfrancisburnet, Mar 16, 2007.

  1. saffronfrancisburnet

    saffronfrancisburnet Member

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    for all and more..if need be...


    bleakness,the view.
    a child that cries,yet
    can not be saved...
    look away we do,not
    to be shamed...
    upon the beauty
    these golden rays
    that dance and change
    a world of rage...
    oceans will fill again..

    weep not upon this,
    sphere we walk.
    for cries of happiness
    also come...
    lavish love,the human
    feel...silver beams
    may also reveal...
    to remember you,
    to remember ...
    bleakness,this view...
    once unerved me....

    no longer ..

    thank you lovenpeace from saff
     
  2. Major Peacenik

    Major Peacenik Member

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    so much poetry on this board is wistful... maybe it's just my mood, but this poem hit me hard with nostalgia. I usually object to overuse of any piece of punctuation, but the "..." are just right in this poem. You did a good job at the right time.
     
  3. saffronfrancisburnet

    saffronfrancisburnet Member

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    thank you for reply.i feel my words may hurt at times...
    just reading through my words again.
    i always write from the moment.
    so what is written is done....

    lovenpeace from saff
     
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