Lovely

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by LivinNreflection, Aug 28, 2004.

  1. LivinNreflection

    LivinNreflection Member

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    LOVELY

    Driving down the road with you
    Windows down, music's loud
    Winds blowing threw my hair
    Your hand softly touches my leg
    No sun, just city lights tonight
    Speed around, finally found
    The perfect spot
    Little light shines, for that little time
    It's been so long I hope it's fine...and it was
    Came back home, held me in your arms
    Under the stars
    Never wanting to leave
     
  2. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

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    loved your innocent and free poem. full of honoring and opening; i could feel the wind in my hair.... turn up the music, for everyone, please :)
     
  3. Spyder

    Spyder La dah de dah

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    end was nice, imagry wise, but i dont think your choice of words let the poem flow well at the end.
     

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