Desire ------------------- share with me a dream lead me through a fantasy create the perfect scene guide me into ecstasy i want to learn more let me look inside your mind unlock the door i wonder what lies behind will i see the peace i need because that's what i desire i've enough of hate , fighting and greed to love each other is all i require just let me know how you feel do you want the same as i i want to see this dream be real together lets bring back the blue sky ok so i wrote this today (btw sorry bout that other poem that i just wrote to keep myself awake lol) i'd really appreciate it if people could give me some advice because i really want to expand my writing skills as much as i can , thanks for taking the time to read peace and love
very nice! i like the rhym schem, you have a very powerful way with words, my best advice is to keep writing and explore different styles and rhyme schemes, writing is as limitless as the sky and the seas, it can go as far as your mind can take it. keep writing your off to a wonderful stat man peace love joy harmony
just keep on writing whatever comes to you . the best poems are the ones that are writin in the passion of the moment. keep up the good work.
