Smiling is Worth a Try

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Bumble, Jan 3, 2007.

  1. Bumble

    Bumble Senior Member

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    I wrote this poem when I finally realized that I needed to be happy. I was depressed for a while after my boyfriend passed away. He always wanted people to be happy, but yet it was hard for me to be happy. I recently got this one published.


    Smiling is Worth a Try

    I am docile to smile.
    It has been a while.
    I have overcome many miles.
    Desolated in my trial.

    Lovin souls have held my hand.
    I thought I was covered in the sand.
    A man reflected his smile on me.
    I think he has found the best of me.

    Smiles were once endurable.
    My tears became friable.
    My state of being is finally reseasonable.
    Finally everything is meaningful.

    Many days will pass me by.
    Smiling is essential before I die.
    I have turned you into I.
    It feels great to finally stop the cries.
     
  2. Nalencer

    Nalencer Dig Yourself

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    I don't like it. It seems like all the lines are just there because they rhyme.
     
  3. athena_skye

    athena_skye Member

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    Okay, I'm not saying this 'cuz I'm a girl and am full of emotion (okay, well, that's a teeny, tiny reason why lol) But I thought that was really pleasant. A breath of fresh air....it really spoke to my heart - I am not alone....
     
  4. Bumble

    Bumble Senior Member

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    thanks. I have been thinking about Griffen a lot lately. It's insane.
     
  5. athena_skye

    athena_skye Member

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    I can understand that. But life will move along, in it's own appropriate way. And remember, life is FULL of statistics, a series of ups and downs....it's not just bad things happening FOREVER....there will be plenty of light in your life that your dear Griffin would want you to have, I'm sure :)

    *Hops off soapbox and walks away like nothing happened....*
     
  6. Caelynn

    Caelynn Yellow Butterfly

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    i love it, i can connect with it and it is beautiful

    though Nalencer has a point... it seems a bit forced.
     

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