Beginning of a fairly good poem :)

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by athena_skye, Dec 15, 2006.

  1. athena_skye

    athena_skye Member

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    I can't erase what's written down
    I rip out the page, but it's always there

    The cold night bares a burdened frown
    To show me boldly how life's not fair

    I can't escape what's dug so deep
    this root that tears away

    I think it's time to sow and reap
    these sins I do portray.
     
  2. Flowers In My Hair

    Flowers In My Hair Spontaneous Joy

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    Keeeeeeep going. :D This has great potential, a wonderful beginning.
     
  3. athena_skye

    athena_skye Member

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    Gracias much :)
    (BTW, I kinda only write good poetry when I'm in pain, so uhm, I'm not looking to "finish" this one any time soon lol)
     
  4. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

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    A deep poem, inviting multiple responses...

    ... rebirth, fire and the festival of lights were what randomly came to mind. :)
     

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