Who will see the sun shine tomorrow?

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by mebesideme, Aug 16, 2004.

  1. mebesideme

    mebesideme Member

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    Bring down and crack the whip
    The skies meet with thunder claps
    The tide of rage is coming in
    The hurricane’s power flows closer
    Swallowing the sand
    Without taking a breath



    I wait at the edge for my fate
    Watching the reflection of the storm
    Where the rain meets the water
    All above, the sky is on fire
    The tendrils of electric snakes
    Pounding out rhythms of impending destruction



    The beaches are empty
    The hotels closed and eerie
    Man made spires jutting through the night
    The miniature windows backlit with false fluorescence
    Taunting the storm with unspoken
    Come and get me!’s


    I say to myself
    If you’re half the storm you think you are
    Do what you can to wash me away
    I wager my life
    On who will make it through the night
    Which of us will see the sun shine tomorrow?

    Wrote this the other night at Myrtle Beach while watching the Hurricane blow through. Good times!
     
  2. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    Really nice! Liked the third stanza the most, and you do a nice job with your imagery, you can feel the power of the storm in this one! Thanks for posting it!
     
  3. osiris

    osiris Senior Member

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    if you drink enough whiskey as you watch the storm you find that you can exactly mirror its peaceful turbulence.


    much love :)
     
  4. littleskinny

    littleskinny Member

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    I agree with Fulmah - the third stanza hgas some breezy potency...! Good stuff
     
  5. kitsune

    kitsune Member

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    that was a good poem about conflict
     
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