"reap of me"

reap of me

august 24, 2006



wordless whispers, windblown hair

a feeling that there's someone there

an untold story, a slanty rhyme

an unbrewed beer and a dull shine

another tale without an ending,

another prophet without a sending,

another child without a mother,

and another waterless sea,

and just one earth, whispering wordlessly-

"reap of me."
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all comments, questions and criticisms accepted with open arms. please give me a few words. thankyou.

 

i think it's excellent, though the rhyming couplet thing is fine 'til the line about the mother

it goes AABBCCDEEE

i mean, it works, because it's beautiful, but that just sticks out

 

i know the rhyme scheme is a tad out of sync, but i stand by not fixing what isn't broken. thankyou very much for the praise .

 

no problem

the last two lines are fabulous

fabulous in a heterosexual kinda way :tongue:

 

I like it

 

Really cool. You're 13?? That's awesome, you are a great poet.

 

wow dude your well good

 

well, thanks. i feel all warm and bubbly inside now .