Save Me

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Faerie Jane, Nov 20, 2006.

  1. Faerie Jane

    Faerie Jane Member

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    I waited for you to come

    Like a lover in the night

    To rescue me from pain

    To make everything alright.


    You, the only thing

    That could sooth my soul

    And comfort my heart

    When life took it's toll


    You turned your back

    You pushed me around

    Taunted and teased

    Then let me down


    Waiting for you with open arms

    Begged you to seize me

    You laughed in my face

    And wouldn't appease me


    Oh sweet angel of death

    Show me some grace

    Please don't turn your back

    Save me from this place
     
  2. GirlInTheGreenGrass

    GirlInTheGreenGrass Member

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    "Angel of death...save me from this place"... so bittersweet. Are you speaking of this angel throughout the entire poem? well, anyway, I love this. You're words could easily be a catchy song. Thank you, friend.
     
  3. oldwolf

    oldwolf Waysharing-not moderating Super Moderator

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    Ahh my sweet friend
    I sat beside you and held you close
    And told you of so much else
    But your expectations blinded you anon

    I told you of your opportunities to Grow
    But you instead would rather throw -
    Blessings and Reverence are the Way
    And I know you know this, yet still are swayed away
    By not facing and confronting and being true
    And finding within that O so Sweet Self
    That Being of purity and light

    For then you need me no more
    In joining your own you have become One
    And are no longer separated from the Change you call for
    For death is Change
    And here I be, Calling to you unheard.

    So my hand still is open to both hold and let go
    Come Be Still and Know and go within
    For Inside you my dear is more than could be desired
    And herein is your own one true love
    So turn not away and your own Self save
     
  4. DroopySnoopy

    DroopySnoopy The ORIGINAL Dr. Droop

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    Just beautiful. It has so much heart. And sorrow, just dripping throughout.
     
  5. Faerie Jane

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    Thank you my dear. Yes, I am speaking about the angel of death throughout this piece
     
  6. Faerie Jane

    Faerie Jane Member

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    Oldwolf, your poem is beautiful. This stanza is awesome.
     
  7. Faerie Jane

    Faerie Jane Member

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    Thank you DS
     
  8. athena_skye

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    I liked it....not alot of grammatical errors. It gets under my skin when someone writes something that just doesn't flow right and I gotta think about what point they were trying to make. I also can't stand it when there are so many typos the reader is all, "so, is this even ENGLISH??" Your poem was easy to read, and a pleasure to read....like to hear more from ya sometime :)
     

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