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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by TrippinBTM, Nov 16, 2006.

  1. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    My first ever untitled poem. It doesn't have to stay that way, but I can't think of anything good for it; maybe you can. :)


    Fire, water, joining, one
    come together in the sun.
    Elements discordantly
    make love, and sing in harmony.

    Yellow flame and running blue
    mingle, mating, make a hue
    unknown before, turning green
    lovely, living, so serene.

    Verdant growing all around,
    meadows forests, in them found
    newfound pleasures to embrace
    feasts of color, blooms of grace.

    Flowers, blossoms, colors bright!
    dancing cheerful in the light.
    My heartbeat speeding, on I stare
    at beauty near too much to bear.

    Red and bloody beats my heart
    but in the green it has it's start
    beating only for that shade
    and all the colors she has made.
     
  2. teh-horace

    teh-horace for your pleasure

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    nice flow

    makes me happy
     
  3. hippie_chick666

    hippie_chick666 Senior Member

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    Very good. I like your writings a lot, and this is one of my favorites.

    Peace and love
     
  4. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    Thank you both. I am also pretty happy with this one, though I'm not entirely sure it says what I want it to, how I want it to. Oh well :)
     

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