need help on a title.. suggestions please

Rain showering down;

Through my being.

My heart in the mist to drown;

Bone prisin ceiling.

Purifying my soul,

Present yourself to the rain.

Cleaning out the hellhole

In my bodies domain

There it goes,

Trickling through the bones.

There is shows,

Stiffled between the moans.

Heart pregnant

With the colorless spray of skys tears,

Cool wistful current,

All dryness clears.

 

It's cool, here are some suggestions, so anyways, I write music, and sometimes poetry, so maybe my ideas will be unique, you can take it or leave it...

"Just A Thought"

"Noontime"
Thats all I could thin of for now, if I think of anything else I'll hit this back up.

Peace,
Chazz

http://nodeal00.tripod.com

 

"The Vehement Expulsion By The Force Of The Will Of The Spirit Of Those Things Which It Deems Unnecessary"
This, of course, could be the title of every poem.

But it especially fits this piece, which will glow all the more when you correct the spelling errors, and tighten up the punctuation.

But far be it from me to give anyone "constructive criticism".

*pops the cork*

paradox anyone?

much love

 

Oh osiris you know you love c.c.

 

those are all very very good titles... any other ones???

 

Good evening. I'm partial to "Water Purification Ecstasy" ...

love and light.

~*sylvan

 

If that is a bit too conservative perhaps "Liquid Ecstasy"

Peace & Frolic

~*

 

"Gray Storm".. but it's not the color of bone... Maybe "Death Storm" to suggest that the knowledge of death brought the storm in the first place. Death in the title's almost a cliche now.. but I've used it. Heh.

 

drunken on paradox, he exclaims:

"I luvvvvvv yooooooou, maaaaaannnnn!"

*hic*

much love