On this cool clear night I totally submit myself to you Already knowing for this act the tremendous price I shall pay Knowing my fate if what others say about you is true I hope al the hearsay is not true, this I pray. If what they say is true I just condemned my eternal soul to hell I really don't care because like the others I'm in love with you Knowing within the ranks of the undead I shall dwell For what I do this night I will pay many dues. As you take me to a place beyond total ecstasy A thousand different scenarios run through my mind The sheer passion I feel, I never want to flee After this my very existence I will have to redefine. I know I will be the envy of others As it circulates I have been with you But from what I understand to another I will never willingly submit to another My feelings for you shall always be true. I totally realize what I have willingly done If I start to develop an unquenchable thirst I don't care Only being able to go out at night never again seeing the sun The unholy existence I choose, I did so without a care.
Hey there...I've read several of your works, and have enjoyed them. I completely understand this one firsthand because I've been there...I hope you don't mind my saying (and if you do, I will not ever make suggestions again) but I kept thinking this one would be a little more genuine if it didn't rhyme...a couple of the rhymes seemed kinda...forced? (for lack of a better term)...but overall I really liked the way you put your feelings out there. I hope to see alot more of your work. And again, please don't take offense to the above comment...just wanting to help.
