Poem

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Dustin, Oct 22, 2006.

  1. Dustin

    Dustin Member

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    Anything
    The first time I saw you was in a dream
    A glimpse of how beautiful life could be
    You looked just like an angel without wings
    A little gift from heaven sent to me
    You slipped away after a warm embrace
    When I woke up I left me heart with you
    I spend my nights hoping to see your face
    I spend my days wishing dreams can come true

    I'd do anything to show you I care
    When you cry I will wipe away your tears
    When you need a hug I'll be standing there
    I'll hold you until your pain disappears

    I look for you in the face of strangers
    Hoping one day I will finally find you there
    Because since the day I saw my angel
    There's nobody else that can compare
    I love every little thing about you
    You don't have to act or wear a disguise
    I will love you no matter what you do
    You will always be perfect in my eyes
    I'd do anything to say I love you
    Buy you a box of candy from the store
    Call you just to say I'm thinking of you
    Leave a dozen roses at your front door

    We can walk along the beach holding hands
    And listen to the waves hit the shoreline
    We can sit and watch the sun meet the land
    Then count all the stars that were left behind

    I want to eat dinner by candlelight
    With your face the only thing I can see
    I want to cuddle with you through the night
    Then wake up with you sleeping next to me
    I don't care as long as we're together
    Because heaven is anywhere you are
    I can't think of a place any better
    Than right here lying in each others arms​
     
  2. supertramp

    supertramp Member

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    (Wiping the tears from my eyes) I really like this....wish I'd wrote it!
     
  3. ethanberry

    ethanberry Member

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    Wow, such a great poem. Made me reminisce my first love.
     
  4. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    Wow. Now THAT is what poetry is supposed to be. I don't think I could heap enough praise on this one, nor does it need any; it's good enough on it's own. But I had to say something. :)

    (and on a technical note, excellent rhyming. It was so subtle that I didn't notice it till near the end, which is good, because that means it's not a distraction)
     
  5. Biida

    Biida Member

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    Amen, brother. Particularly about the rhyming. This is a beautiful piece. :) Thanks for sharing, man. <3
     
  6. Dustin

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    Thanks so much for the comments.
     
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