tell me what you think (constructive criticism only) The Lynching I'm not sure what to say The oak tree bore a new branch today It's blood red petals fall like crimson rain It's face contorted in fear and pain The tree is the end of life so young Whether by the noose or the loaded gun And the tree noes not of the seeds it soes A ruby red flower at it roots does grow.
That's pretty good. The only thing I can really critique is that "noes" should be "knows" as well as "soes" and "sows". Don't know if that was intentional or an accident. Otherwise, it is a short, concise poem. You say what you want to say and end. I like that quality in poems. I would much rather read a concise but elaborate poem like this than a wordy poem that winds on and on and on... You get my point. I also like that it rhymes. I think it is well written. Peace and love
