a poem from my heart

Discussion in 'The Whiners' started by DazedDreamer, Aug 17, 2004.

  1. DazedDreamer

    DazedDreamer Member

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    ok well it took me a while to put this on here im really affarid what people will think of it so be nice



    Insane?
    Is that what you mean
    When you live in reality
    And I live in a dream
    Its nice here
    So what if I’m mad
    I have all the things
    You secretly wish you had
    I’m sorry your trapped
    In that world full of hate
    But deep in your mind
    There is a gate
    don’t be afraid
    Just walk on through
    Its so amazing
    what the paths lead you to
    What are you doing
    You cant go back
    Reality is dead
    They’ve been attacked
    But its ok, they killed themselves
    I watched them dig there graves
    But I was here, in my land
    And that’s why I was saved
    Still wanna call me insane
    Well go ahead and try
    But ill be here in my world
    Watching your world die!
    By
    Brooke
     
  2. Fractual_

    Fractual_ cosmos factory

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    its good for the most part
     
  3. DazedDreamer

    DazedDreamer Member

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    thanks, i know most people dont like ryming peoms, i dont really that much either, but for some reason this one just worked.
     
  4. Fractual_

    Fractual_ cosmos factory

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    i dont think it really matters either way, its the meaning that counts.
     
  5. unionpacificrailroad

    unionpacificrailroad Member

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    PEace,

    i really like non rhyming poems. i foudn yours to be very true from teh heart. i love it! jsut be careful to point out what route there taking and which you chose to take and itle all be groovy! keep the truth

    later

    the tired flower child
     
  6. soulrebel51

    soulrebel51 i's a folkie.

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    its pretty good, good job
     
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