Spew-age.

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by MoonjavaSeed, Sep 3, 2006.

  1. MoonjavaSeed

    MoonjavaSeed Yeah, Toast!

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    Tapped
    sitting in a circle
    created by a rug
    my teacup-saucer eyes
    shattered and shards trickle
    down my swollen face, with spider streaks travelling first class
    tapped
    I only spin feverishly
    when the earth smiles at me dullishly
    Putting my old habits in a a pinafore-frock pocket
    for another fancy time
    tapped
    a little less inhibited
    but the spectacular freedom shrieks for itself
    while I arrange myself on this curiosity shop shelf
    and wait to buy myself a me
    paid in dollars made of sand
    but I could never earn enough
    to appreciate sick smiles,
    mountains ranges of coffee that grows on for miles,
    all the errors, save the trials
    or the leftover carpet
    everyone loathes
    it sits smartly under this rug, as planned,
    pretty inhibited.


    I'll appologize in advance for whoever I just put through this... It's been a long ass while... :confused:
     
  2. i_need_a_miracle

    i_need_a_miracle Venusian Goddess

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    nice. i liked it.
     
  3. Hippievixen

    Hippievixen Lifetime Supporter Lifetime Supporter

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    I love these lines :)
     
  4. FreeBird1969

    FreeBird1969 Fleas on their paws.

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    This is wonderful.

    I've already read it, and I've told you what I think of it.

    But it really is wonderful.

    Buy myself a me...Jesus.
     
  5. MoonjavaSeed

    MoonjavaSeed Yeah, Toast!

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    Oh gosh.. thanks all :D
     
  6. honeyhannah

    honeyhannah herbuhslovuh

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    Yeah, I like it too. It's very intriguing and full of aesthetic triggers... nice use of language and description.
     
  7. SomeSouthernTown

    SomeSouthernTown Member

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    That was touching. "...with spider streaks travelling first class..." I liked the flow it had.
     
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