Born again of water by HS Beyond Beautiful I have seen, cloud a sky for me with tree spirits make a brain the image of this spirit already done, gee, thanks crayon. How come white is the only color in the box? No, I see black too, not to shapely though. Moving to much, not connected like white smooth and graceful, energy within. The sky cloud white energy is biggest, the tree spirit same stuff is smaller, and from what I've seen of brains the energy smaller yet, lots smaller. For those of us reborn into spirit, we tend to get ahead of ourselves at first the earth seems slow there are many new seed to sow At first the spirit souls awaken to a new idea of sharing and healing not one of death of the body or protection from fear of the earth. I am like a frozen thing thawing like a new flower in the spring swaying to the first warm breeze a bud will open soon and smile
I like the transition from the box of crayons into spring and rebirth. Seems like a very solid piece, even if it resorts to a few cliches, we're all guilty of that now and again. Nice piece, I enjoyed reading it.
I guess I was mostly thinking of the last stanza. The problem is, it sounds so familiar to people that they don't really give it a careful reading, it kind of slips by them, you know. A lot of the best images have been used thousands of times. I use cliches myself, hard to entirely avoid them.
