That's pretty good, but maybe cut a few scenes: get rid of the spiders, sink, car, house, cops, helicopter, and water. Begin with the part where your clothes fall off and go from there. I think we have the makings of a blockbuster.
Sorry to bump an old thread, but I just found this and think those of you who enjoyed my picture will be amused. http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/333294