Spoiled

Discussion in 'U.K.' started by JOsie, Jul 20, 2004.

  1. JOsie

    JOsie Member

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    We sat on the hill and looked out
    over the roofs and into the darkness
    our hands woven together like a zip
    our legs entwined like snapped rope
    our heads together, using each other
    to support ourselves, to hold ourselves up
    to hold ourselves together

    The sky was full of nothing, no stars
    no light, just darkness except for
    the sliding dots of light on the motorway.
    We watched and sat and watched
    the people heading home.
    I asked her where she would like to be
    right now, this moment in time.

    "In bed with my boyfriend."
    We unzip and uncoil and unfurl ourselves
    and i wish i was a dot of light.
    Heading home.
     
  2. SunshineLily

    SunshineLily Member

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    Ooh my Josie, that poem really touched me. And the imagery is so clever and well written. Thankyou :)
    I might print it off i think...
    Love,
    Sunny
    xxx
     
  3. Mercy

    Mercy Member

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    You're an official genius.
     
  4. JOsie

    JOsie Member

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    you're just saying that so you can get a cd:p
     
  5. PeopleAreStrange

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  6. roly

    roly Senior Member

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    as ever.... a josie masterpiece....thanks for sharing it with us.

    roly.xxx
     
  7. borut16

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    Great write, especially I like the way you broke it up. :)

    Love,
    Borut
     
  8. Mercy

    Mercy Member

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    Ahem...where exactly is my CD, eh Mr???? I thought it would be waiting for me when I got back from Spain, but noooooooo... :(
     
  9. ArtLoveMusic

    ArtLoveMusic Senior Member

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    hey man.

    wow... u know im always a fan of your writing. I must say your style is so different to what i usually like... yet i always love what you do and this is no exception :D
    U still going to come stay when im in brighton?? :D
     
  10. Brightwolf

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    dude you didnt tell me wrote poems on the gatherings man cool wat a masterpiece man peace
     
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