Hi, I jotted down this poem this morning, it simply formed itself in my mind, and I continued working on it in the afternoon after coming from the swimming pool. It is all fiction, it’s the monologue of a girl/ lady/ man/ boy, whose love has faded away and she/ he is now trying to make sense of the experience. Fading Love Now I know I’ve wasted so much time Only to make you love me I walk on the shore Throwing away into the sea All the broken pieces of this memory Pieces of life I’ve wasted When I could have done something else When I could have been happy Love doesn’t make much sense Why have I messed up with you? What came over me? It was all absurd What I’ve been through I’m trying now to understand I see you differently now Maybe I’m a different one too I am tired of loving you It’s not fun anymore The feeling is gone It’s hard to believe it was ever there You look so common You mean nothing to me I cry when I remember How we used to be Who is to be blamed? Me? You? Time?
It's good, and like Dietcoketree said it is something I can relate to...but it's so general. Maybe you could anchor it down a bit with some specific images. Like saying HOW the lover is different, what has changed. You know, some real concrete ideas
VERY much how I feel. A relationship of soon to be two months and it will end shortly. I see now we were meant to be just friends....
