A couple of poems

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by pantherbaebe, Jul 20, 2006.

  1. pantherbaebe

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    Here's a couple of poems I have written. Please let me know what you think of them!
     
  2. pantherbaebe

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    My fellow LUNAtics!
    Do we bathe ourselves in silver glory?
    And feast upon enlightenment?
    Dip your fingers into purity
    You have been shown the way by a fellow EARTHling!
    You tasted him in your mouth
    And felt him in your belly
    His power flowed through your mind like water over the waterbed
    Creating new ways, new thoughts, new......
    Everything is new, until it is old
    Walk up the path and slide your hand on rounded belly
    She is mother of us all
    What I say has been said before, WILL be said again
    That's the power of the WILL
    Hear the NEW Testament!
    It says you should wash behind your ears
    Don't put your toe jam on the mirrors
    And always eat your vegetables!
    A copper, a penny
    How much are these thoughts worth?
    Dance and twirl
    Like a ride at the local fair
    Freedom is in the air
    LUNA is in the air
    I am in the....
     
  3. pantherbaebe

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    This is to my darling flower
    Whom can not blossom
    In darkness told
    My soul too dim
    To cast shadow upon stoney fortress
    Decreed in Holy Name
    Stay for the End
    I'll pluck you from the ground
    To rest eternally in Crystal vase
     
  4. pantherbaebe

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    Somewhere in the sunlight
    I have lost my death
    Unto a thousand needles it has plunged itself
    For my shining sight saw what others forsake
    Behind my heart sits a little red devil
    Pulling the strings in violent momentum

    To wish upon that shooting star
    Was to wish for blackness in the mind
    Your superstition supersedes my logic
    And in the tornado of love
    We both lost all

    My eyes sewn shut
    Was fate enough
    For even Soul has its limits
    This was mine

    No thought shall pass
    Through lips unbitten
    To bleed was too human

    It was in Memory
    Blank and horrific

    No where to go
     
  5. Biida

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    Luna, Luna, Luna
    Makes me want to dance and dance
    And dance all through the starlit,
    Moonlit
    Sentence of a single night
    And to Life!

    :)

    I thank you.
     
  6. pantherbaebe

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    And thank you for that fantastic response!

    Happy dancing and may LUNA light your way!
     
  7. myself

    myself just me

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    I have liked very much the idea of losing one's death - it's very poetic. Were you talking about someone giving up his/her wish for suicide? It sounded like that to me when I read the beginning.
    In the second stanza, were you talking about two different lovers, she - rationa, and he - superstitious?
    The poem seems to be made up of fragments - are they only pieces of Memory (it seems so at the end of the poem)?
    It is a very interesting poem (I am only trying to see if I got it right - if what I saw in it when I read it is what you had in mind when you wrote it).
     
  8. pantherbaebe

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    In a way, yes it was someone giving up their wish for suicide. But not suicide, per se. More like a wish for death..
    Yes that is exactly it.
    Yes it is fragmented memory. Almost like waking up from a dream and only remembering bits, only it wasn't a dream.
    You hit the nail on the head :)
     
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