get pregnant while you still can

the setting sun melts the sky
the gods wave goodbye
then suddenly its peter pan
he shouts get pregnant while you still can
fly away peter pan.

*bows*

 

My immediate thought was "Where's Wendy? Barefoot and pregnant back home, taking care of the lost boys?"

Seriously, nice prose.

 

I'll admit it; I don't really get it.

 

Well it's really deep so i wouldnt expect you to trippin.

 

ahhah I actually really like it. It's sorta abstract and .. I just liked it

 

LiverSteam,

Your poem doesn't make sense. Creating something abstract doesn't necessarily make it deep.

 

i liked it quite a bit -- whether it "made sense" or not.

i liked the flow and i really enjoyed the imagery -- which i feel was very profound for a piece of work that is only 5 or 6 lines long.

thanks for sharing

 

Hey Ganja: I just got annoyed to see the author's comments to Trippin. It was rude. I don't care if anyone's poems make sense or not. Write on . . .

 

sheesh . . I think I'm really in a pissy mood too. It happens sometimes. :&

 

i was just fucking around with trippin. i can see how some wouldnt get it and how some would. its just how you look at it

 

maybe peter pan wasn't really peter pan

maybe peter pan was a manifestation of child-hood memories

maybe this manifestation spoke of pregnancy

because Hey,

Maybe it's that time to spread your legs
and absorb the cum.

Rather than cry, play with legos
and shit your pants.

+

 

you hijacked my thread dood