Crazy Man...

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Hippiemomma, Jun 27, 2006.

  1. Hippiemomma

    Hippiemomma Member

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  2. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    Hey, I like it. Good rhyming and obviously a good story/message too.

    Only thing was I stumbled over the word "some" in the line "in some foreign land". It doesn't seem to fit the rhythm, at least not as I read it. Maybe it's just me. But it might read better if you changed it to "that".
     

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