nameless poem i wrote

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by HippyAtHeart90, Apr 24, 2006.

  1. HippyAtHeart90

    HippyAtHeart90 Member

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    I had a talk with God and asked him for a sign
    I asked him for the courage and i asked to buy some time
    I told him all the things i needed and I named the reasons why
    But then i had just one last thing before i said goodbye
    With pleeding tone i prayed to God that He would make you mine.

    He told me not to worry, that everything was fine
    He provided me the answers and posted up the sign
    He took care of the things i needed and even slowed down time
    Then as God turned to walk away, I repeated my final thought
    He said "Im sorry, child, but that one cant be bought"


    Okay, there, if it sucks, tell me, i just need some feedback. Oh, and if you have a decent title or suggestion feel free to tell!
     
  2. mudpuddle

    mudpuddle MangaHippiePornStar Lifetime Supporter

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    Sounds Alright to me...

    Well Done...
     
  3. pop_terror

    pop_terror Member

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    I think it's excellent.
     
  4. teh-horace

    teh-horace for your pleasure

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    i like how it flows

    i like flowy things

    this is flowy
     
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