Title Number 7

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by nouronion, Apr 20, 2006.

  1. nouronion

    nouronion Member

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    Underneath the hypnotic aurora you sit
    Cross-legged and face to the sky
    Beginning daybreak you find one shadow
    Your umbra total black ecstasy.
    Smoke from your lips drips
    Down to the river
    Flowing orange….green rocks
    Two fairies one frog

    You’re a time traveler in the present moment
    With an eye for the future
    I’ll ask……
    What do you see?

    !!!!!!Three years bliss blue sky
    forgotten roads remembered grass
    remembered trees remembered bugs
    and air oh god there’s more!!!!!!!!
    Rejoicing song seventh heaven ahhhh
    Hair blowing in the wind
    And two fairies, one frog
    In an orange river.

    Still you sit in lotus position with the sun rising
    The world telling you its secrets
    And you share your soul with the world.
     
  2. napolean inrags95

    napolean inrags95 Member

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    theres a lot of repeating words in there, so you could make this into a sestina if you were interested in expanding it.
     
  3. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    Man, that's good. Like joyous rapture, i dig it.
     
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