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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by SillyGreenMeep, Apr 7, 2006.

  1. SillyGreenMeep

    SillyGreenMeep Member

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    It looks like I must be on top
    I can tell from this feeling in my stomach
    about to drop
    maybe further down than the distance
    between myself and the pavement
    6 stories high

    I imagine the feeling of hitting the pavement
    crashing through the concrete
    lying limp in the basement
    of a 40 year old building
    and in this day dream
    i wonder
    will i ever find the strength to stand up

    will my legs be capable of carrying my soul
    back up the stairs
    to where my body currently lingers
    in a room so small...

    with such a long way to fall

    or will i need to take the elevator again.
    my dependency on such machinery
    is a fault that i will take personally
    like my dependency on those around me

    and my tendancy of
    mistaking my daydreams
    for a reality, that has not yet come to pass.
    and without its passing there are possibilities
    of things that have not struck me
    so I will try with all my might
    to tame my mind to recognize
    this feeling i get
    when i fear the worst
    to prepare for the best

    because my fretting
    is just a waste of time
    where joy could be mine.
     
  2. Benjiman

    Benjiman Member

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    "and my tendancy of
    mistaking my daydreams
    for a reality, that has not yet come to pass."

    :) i like it lots :D
     
  3. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    There are so many levels on this one, at least in my mind. I read it twice, I love it. :)

    By the way, your title, with the first few lines, drew to mind the roadrunner and the coyote, always falling in his canyons. Intentional?
     
  4. osiris

    osiris Senior Member

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    Might your fret not for joy and find it a joy to fret? Or better yet: Pour the Deluge of your Heart into the Temple of Set.

    People are always fighting with the Crocodile; if they would just be so gracious as to feed it, they could pass their way to the Riddling Sphinx, and enter unto the Kingdom of Heaven.

    :)
     
  5. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    oh my there's a rhythm to this... a natural flow of thought, of perception. incredible work! :)
     
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