meandering a midnight

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by EternalHunter, Mar 5, 2006.

  1. EternalHunter

    EternalHunter Member

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    I trace a line from freckle to freckle.
    A red trail the Judas of my nail
    borrowed from the blood.
    With ayahuasca eyes we were
    convinced of lines where there
    were no lines and I drew constellations
    of kites to fly the skies of my skin.

    Sheltered within the ages the stars
    are no longer warriors of myth,
    they cuddle shlyly into the suburban smog
    and hide wisely from the mirth of the moon.
    Constellations etched and chisled in
    too deep to bleed and too sharp to sin
    fade away to nothing, lines lost to
    loud currents without their angles to keep
    them firmly in place--a circle escapes.
     
  2. inbloom

    inbloom as the crow flies...

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    Wow! That's amazing, I love it! I haven't read a poem
    that good in ages, man, that was incredible! Thank you
    so much for sharing that! :)


    I especially loved this line:
    "With ahyausca eyes we were
    convinced of lines"

    Oh, one thing though. It's spelled ayahuasca. ;)
     
  3. EternalHunter

    EternalHunter Member

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    Thanks for your encouragment and spelling hints...late hours destroy my cognitive abilities. :)
     
  4. inbloom

    inbloom as the crow flies...

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    :D

    Do you have any more pieces you'd like to share? I'd be very interested in reading more. :)
     
  5. osiris

    osiris Senior Member

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    "a circle escapes.", she writes.

    *puts forefinger to lips and silently considers*

    But do we ever escape The Circle?

    :)
     
  6. Weatherman

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    Very good man.
     
  7. DoyalConQueso

    DoyalConQueso Member

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    this is incredible stuff. You're a capital P Poet. I'm a sucker for constellation talk. "kites to fly the skies of my skin." Awesomeness. I like the stars new role in suburbia but Orion is still a warrior even veiled in pollution. Gracias for this
     
  8. EternalHunter

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    Haha, thanks guys. (The bat scene cracks me up by the way).
    Osiris you are quite right as usual, thought the circle may escape us we are happy prisioners to its dimensions.
    Inbloom, I will try to post something soon. You can always search my archives, it's almost all poetry....years worth, happy trails.
     
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