my poem

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by tumbledownDNA, Feb 22, 2006.

  1. tumbledownDNA

    tumbledownDNA Member

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    this is just a little poem i wrote for a creative writing class, and i thought it was one of my better ones. pretty abstract but i like it. hope u do too

    Come Calling


    Come calling for me,

    Oh brothers and others

    My sisters,

    My Blisters

    Soring from thumb to sea with

    Next week in my knees

    And last week fresh in my head.



    Come calling

    I beg your pardon, but I’m still waiting.



    Lay down your arms and thread

    A needle.

    Weave a cloth of quilted fashion, ancient theme and

    Gifted passion, patches colored with no particular theme

    Nor definite pattern.



    I would surrender my spirit and

    Tune the strings

    Of another, a brother, a mother, a father

    If only you’d come calling.
     
  2. tumbledownDNA

    tumbledownDNA Member

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    damn i don't know why it posted all double spaced like that. sorry
     
  3. Cloudminerva

    Cloudminerva Member

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    Hey, that was cool! The poem was definitely on the abstract side, but as I continued on, it pieced itself together and made a lot of sense. It wasn't about one particular thing, but it was a culmination of different subjects that weaved themselves together. I like it, dude.


    Later,
    Ben.
     
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