i just layed my head down on the table, and just slipped away to tomorrow. i was already there. it was beauty stuck all over, and it was everything imagined. and there were angels hanging over, none of my relatives were there. i escaped into tomorrow, and i melted to forever. the colours became my cover, and my skin became the air. i crumpled beneathe the sound waves, my body fizzled out of existence, my eyes flowed out their sockets, and they joined the evening breeze in me. never again will i return to the vibration deep below. no more will my self be, in the form of human eyes. i've gone to a new surface, i've reached a brand new phase. no more will my mind be constrained in you or i no me. and now the transition has settled and my mind has rotted down.. the world is just a pixel, on the shade of moondust. the earth is just a danger the soul is just a maze. the thought is an illusion and the mind is just a phase, be free.
*freaks the fuck out* this ..... is your best work BY FAR. SERIOUSLY, I am fucking BLOWN away right now. It is ABSOLUTELY BEAUTIFUL!!!!!! FUCK, James.... You have INTENSE TALENT, dude. Seriously. wow. <3
Great poem, man. I can honestly say that poetry doesn't have a special spot with me, but you're good enough at writing it to catch my fancy. I said this to you before, but it's a very complete poem. All the analogies fit just right, especially in the 2nd stanza. It's a very good description of the feeling you're trying to portray, and it's quite deep. Keep up the good work. =)
Hey, thanks everybody! I appreciate it, alot. Josh, as I said to you before, I appreciate you actually pointing stuff out in the poem, and commenting on it. Thanks! Bekka, thanks, as always, for being a fanatic. lol.
this is great! the first stanza's my fave -- such pleasing discombobulation! wonderful feeling. good work.
SOOO GOOD MAN!! such a great poem =) you captured the experience so damn well =)) it's funny how we just keep rollin on and growing too =Þ keep that mind open and that heart sOoo guiding and loving!!!! and keeeeeep writing brother!!! keeeep writing---- let those words keep spilling through you, cherish that inspiration, keep it in Love!!!! have you ever painted man? you should get a canvas and just rip open onto it man, brrraah brah brah or take it soft and eassyy, something beautiful and delicate and inspirited probably both and so many other ways too! when you paint just like writing =)) KEEEP ON MAN!!!!
i turned out my music and started to sing your poem. i think it has a strong feeling in it, i did get a sort of feeling like independence and well i don't know how to describe it. i allready saw the line under your picture before and i started to think about it.. i think you are an interesting person to talk with, about everything and nothing. so if you like to talk to me, say so and i would love to see more of your work!! edit: i didnt read the line that was above the picture haha, well it's still a good line
Wow, thanks everybody! I didn't expect so many nice comments. Magnamity man, thanks for the inspiring words! Nananie, sure, I'd love to talk sometime. Ass me to MSN, or PM me, or whatever.
