this is crap. but idk...it made me happy. sunshine welcomes the day which is to be interrupted by night in the morning light we lay untouched,reality out of sight our love is beauty our passion is power come to the fields and bask in the safety that this freedom brings entrapped, hidden under a mask im your goddess, your my king our love is beauty our passion is power
then it was a success, in that respect if in no other. However, I liked it a lot, I wouldn't call it crap by any means, it was inispired. Just one thing I want to comment on: That second line is a bit jarring, because you're talking about day, then jump to it later being broken by the night, then jump back the the morning. maybe you could write it: "which calls to end the lonesome night" lonesome may not be the right word, but I think something like that would flow better. Keep it all in that tender moment. BTW, cool hair
