I Don't Mean Love Exactly,

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by ripple23, Dec 22, 2005.

  1. ripple23

    ripple23 Member

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    It’s just that you reminded me
    Of a river and a stream
    holding hands
    laughter from some drowned place
    in the sea

    Your body,
    like a giant sun scattered with lakes
    eyes that everywhere spread
    the perfect
    rhythm of your glace

    I slept beyond the mythology of the desert
    and heard,
    where its shadows begin
    an angel’s gray harp strings
    whispering of a few things
    lounging in your soul


    and I might have come with the intention of the forests
    Waiting for years
    to drink from your breath
    only to release a cool wind below the mountains
    To watch you
    spin a blanket and keep warm.
     
  2. GypsyPriestess

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  3. paix

    paix Senior Member

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    wow, I love it, especially the last bit

    truly lovley, whoever you wrote it about is very lucky :0)
     
  4. Bhaskar

    Bhaskar Members

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    Thats simply magical imagery. Brilliant. Pure inspiration dripping from every line.
     
  5. *electrica*

    *electrica* Member

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    It's so wow. I love the imagery and it makes me feel all nice and warm.
     
  6. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

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    How inspiring, excellent work.
     
  7. sunshine'sbutterfly

    sunshine'sbutterfly Member

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    it's beautiful. i could see everything as i was reading it!
     
  8. ripple23

    ripple23 Member

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    thanks everyone
     

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