In the Pine

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Lozi, Dec 5, 2005.

  1. Lozi

    Lozi Senior Member

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    In the Pine
    Make me laugh like you used to
    oh snowman with your wintery glare,
    when the snowset sun set over heed i glance at you in glory.
    you face me with a whistlestop smile
    and in the white
    you
    stop to whisper my name to the wind.
    careful with every breath
    you take,
    every morsel of fibre
    in your being-how do you break the scented silence.
    incense and cinnamon trees
    that pine for an everlasting love.
    But still the milk goes sour
    and the cookies crumble.
    Father christmas rarely comes anymore.

    Cellophane secrest
    wrapped up in a look, oh, but how i occasionally
    peep

    -at each solitary package
    the presents matter
    i, with such another as you
    with your wallet of worth
    not an inch of the world are you,
    seemingly golden,
    but not from sunlight.

    The horded gleams whisking me
    away from each silvery day that goes by.
    When i cry, you sometimes hear me.
    Outside my windowsill(the first floor)
    You creep and crunch over the sludgy gravel,
    but he doesnt care,
    not much anyway.

    And in time in time dear,
    i dream, i dream of you
    in some foreign field
    that is forever narnia.
    A land of iced fantasies-in a milkyway of intoxication.
    High in a talent of amorous features,
    the perfect world blanketed,
    in a duvet of beauty.
    Then i hold your hand and,
    sometimes
    we sit up at the stars,
    underneath a heavy pine tree.


    But waking hours come so quickly,
    nowadays.
     
  2. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

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    In the Pine


    Make me laugh like you used to
    oh snowman with your wintery glare,
    when the snowset sun set over heed i glance at you in glory.
    you face me with a whistlestop smile
    and in the white
    you
    stop to whisper my name to the wind.
    careful with every breath
    you take,
    every morsel of fibre
    in your being-how do you break the scented silence.
    incense and cinnamon trees
    that pine for an everlasting love.
    But still the milk goes sour
    and the cookies crumble.
    Father christmas rarely comes anymore.

    Cellophane secrest
    wrapped up in a look, oh, but how i occasionally
    peep

    -at each solitary package
    the presents matter
    i, with such another as you
    with your wallet of worth
    not an inch of the world are you,
    seemingly golden,
    but not from sunlight.

    The horded gleams whisking me
    away from each silvery day that goes by.
    When i cry, you sometimes hear me.
    Outside my windowsill(the first floor)
    You creep and crunch over the sludgy gravel,
    but he doesnt care,
    not much anyway.

    And in time in time dear,
    i dream, i dream of you
    in some foreign field
    that is forever narnia.
    A land of iced fantasies-in a milkyway of intoxication.
    High in a talent of amorous features,
    the perfect world blanketed,
    in a duvet of beauty.
    Then i hold your hand and,
    sometimes
    we sit up at the stars,
    underneath a heavy pine tree.


    But waking hours come so quickly,
    nowadays.




    Yay! He is here, he is here, Father Christmas is here... :)


    * Oh, grand job, I love it.

    I took the liberty of making it bigger, in my response,
    for these old eyes... and adding a bit of pine color.
    I wanted your happy poem to expand in its fullness.
     
  3. winter skye dream

    winter skye dream Member

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    i loved i wish i had the writting skill that you have
     
  4. Lozi

    Lozi Senior Member

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    thanks :)
     
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