ok so this one is posted somewhere else on this hipforums site and i probly put it in the wrong place cuz people have looked at it and nobody has commented on how bad it was or wat i need to fix or anything so i think this is the place for it. so i wrote a song yesterday....my friends said it was good but they dnt understand it cuz none of em know wat the 27 curse is...and i also think they r just being nice... so i just wnt some feed back even if it isnt a good comment. i am open to any suggestions on how to make my writing better. i wnt b afended in anyway. iv'e just started this writing thing so any help is good. Another 27 Chorus Here’s a tale of a loveless man A man I knew, o so sad For days and days he wept on and on Then he discovered his baby was gone Verse 1 He had forgotten the days and nights He had spent with other men’s wives When he was lost and alone To the cat house he would go Fun had turned into crime Drug possession he did for his time (chorus) Verse 2 Night after night, show after show He followed his dream carelessly unknown So with nothing to do He strummed his guitar as it went out of tune Eyes blazed, needles and bongs Wasting away to his selfish song (chorus) Verse 3 The man I knew loveless struck Depression is an evil cult Nothing to do and nothing to see He just faded away from the rock n’ roll scene Another 27 has joined the club Wasted away with drugs ending verse (change guitar for few lines- talk nxt lines) self centered thoughts and depression taunts rockers life styles is a little nuts (guitar solo fades-end of song)
