thought some of you might like this

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Duck, Sep 7, 2005.

  1. Duck

    Duck quack. Lifetime Supporter

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    You were around since the start of creation
    And infinite you are with no limitation
    But I will not subject to your mutilation
    The scars you cause I wear with pride and celebration
    You feed my mutation
    Adding towards my transformation

    All the faking and the pretending...
    Fake friends for fake lives
    Be truly nice and get shat on

    It is the asshole that thrives
    Because I have a heart to them I am shit
    And it matters not how much shit strives
    Shit is still shit and that's how it is
    Lets see what happens when this shit gets knives


    Your attacks are just stimulation
    You are the light for my cultivation

    The blade loves me more than any person could
    It loves and embraces, through my blood to my heart
    Takes away the pain and soothes my soul
    Glues together pieces that were once apart

    Some attack themselves searching for liberation
    But it is just unrealized masturbation
    Self inflicted extermination,
    Will lead to no kind of salvation

    I thought she was different, and could be trusted
    but she just caused more emotional rape
    couldn't leave it alone, couldn't understand
    it is just my way to escape


    I will fight on until my expiration
    It is the only way to survive my embarkation
    My journey towards my final permutation
    Which will end when I reach the final destination

    I think I will have my brains fly through my head
    Just as soon as I have enough for a gun
    If only I could see when they discover my corpse
    That would make it so much more fun

    And though both may have small jubilation
    Neither will have victorious exaltation
    I can only hope I leave behind a reputation
    That gives others education
    And leads to their replication

    Although I do regret, I cannot take it back
    As my corpse will tell you, I am dead
    I finally did it and now I understand
    That all I have done is joined my head
     
  2. soulrebel51

    soulrebel51 i's a folkie.

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    The last two stanzas that end in "ation" rhymes sound rather forced.
     
  3. Duck

    Duck quack. Lifetime Supporter

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    I dunno

    I made the whole "ation" poem a LOOOOONNNNGGGG time ago
    and I started making a suicide thing, (just a stanza) and decided to add part of the "ation" poem (never named it) and I ended up adding most of it...

    this part WAS forced:
    I thought she was different, and could be trusted
    but she just caused more emotional rape
    couldn't leave it alone, couldn't understand
    it is just my way to escape
     
  4. jojoeyes

    jojoeyes kinda high

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    yeah it feels like u just used a rhyming dictionary and listed whatever u saw into sentences. give us a new way of looking at stuff instead of just a bunch of rhymes.
     
  5. Duck

    Duck quack. Lifetime Supporter

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    I can't stand using rhyming dictionaries... it's so..... deceiving
     
  6. SeamusHeaney

    SeamusHeaney Member

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    you suck.
     
  7. Duck

    Duck quack. Lifetime Supporter

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    yes I know, I don't like TS Ellot and therfore I am the most vile and disgusting waste of life possible
     
  8. osiris

    osiris Senior Member

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    "If only I could see when they discover my corpse
    That would make it so much more fun"

    According to some, this is possible.

    I rather enjoyed it. It's vulgar. Vulgarity is a nice break from all the pathetic attempts at high-mindedness one tends to see in these parts. Wouldn't it be a hoot to find out that just one of the people that post on any forum, anywhere, were sincerely how they represented themselves, and not just some phantasmagoric ego-projection?

    Or would that just be boring?
     
  9. Duck

    Duck quack. Lifetime Supporter

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    thank you, I was going for vulgarness and extremity
    I try to be true to me, when I first started posting I lied about not being a virgin, but now I'm just about completely honest, the ine thing that is different, is I don't usually bitch at strangers as much in real life, I still do, but not nearly as much
     
  10. SeamusHeaney

    SeamusHeaney Member

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    Get a room, gayboys.
     
  11. osiris

    osiris Senior Member

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    "Get a room, gayboys."
    __________________


    I already got the room. All that's left to do is hunt you down, strap you in a gimp suit, and put the red rubber ball in your mouth. Or did you think that we were going to have all the fun without you? :)
     
  12. Duck

    Duck quack. Lifetime Supporter

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    I would love to force feed that guy his own dick
    then again, how can I force feed him with somehting I can't even find?
     
  13. SeamusHeaney

    SeamusHeaney Member

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    Your comedy is as good as your poetry.
     
  14. Duck

    Duck quack. Lifetime Supporter

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    ehh.... fuck you
     
  15. SeamusHeaney

    SeamusHeaney Member

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    Was that another poem?
     
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