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body language

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by dc-vision, Jul 9, 2004.

  1. dc-vision

    dc-vision Member

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    I am the voyeur
    of the witnessing
    the way your fingertips
    glide over glistening skin
    in nervous glances my way
    and unconscious body language

    I know love does not come easy
    to a small town boy like you
    and this tension of being so close
    to what your body needs
    is making me delirious
    with a longing equal to yours

    oh the slow vibrational drag
    as magnetism makes
    rational thought a task
    I am wandering like your fingers
    over that able body landscape
    and salty droplets of summer haze

    I know love does not come easy
    to a small town boy like you
    and I am watching this opportunity
    building in tensile sensuality
    we may not make aching contact today
    but there are tomorrows in waiting

    ©2003 DC Vision

     
    dc-vision, Jul 9, 2004
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  3. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    The ending was a bit of a let down....too abrupt for me, doesn't feel like a proper closure.
    Also the lack of any punctuation brings things down too.

    Over all good imagery, not the most fascinating but keeps the interest going.

    "©2003 DC Vision "

    Darn, so that means I can't print this and sell it to my friends? ;)
     
    KittenX, Jul 9, 2004
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