so be nice!! okay its old, and needs work. I wrote it in 2002, when I was very sad- here it is: "Star Bound" The clock's hands run lazy Life is dripping on hard-wood floor, And water keeps flowing warm like a tropical honeymoon. Contemptous eyes grow hazy as the waves roll by in crimson-red streaks. Peace becomes a knife held by self-rightiuos hands, entangled by blue liguid sky. The water transforms to a sufficating blue, A drip slashes the surface creating slow flowing images beneath the wave It dances with am erie somnolence Like a newly weds first kiss. The clocks hands are at final rest during these moments decades of life have passed within seconds while everything that is real has stayed exactly the same This day is now eternal darkness. suspended- as tree limbs in the blackened sky, your face is remembered- your face is captured- forever In the rapturous- unforgiving bleakness of a misshappen star. Dec. 8 2002
ohhh girl... that is lovely, just like you... especially 'This day is now eternal darkness. suspended- as tree limbs in the blackened sky, your face is remembered- your face is captured- forever In the rapturous- unforgiving bleakness of a misshappen star.'
it is very very good, I love the imagery i am gettting while reading it, and the mood was very strong coulda flowed a lil' smoother, but it's still great
