Patchwork Girl

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by octofryed, Jul 4, 2004.

  1. octofryed

    octofryed Member

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    patchwork girl


    the zombies walk in shadows
    but i'm not buying what they sell
    i lost all my money
    threw my wallet down a wishing well

    made it threw the shakedown crowd
    stumbled thru the tents a while
    the trees were swaying back and forth
    the moon looked on and simply smiled

    found my way down to the circle
    of bongos, congas, and djembe drums
    synchronized my pounding heart
    took a puff and filled my lungs

    saw a girl in a patchwork dress
    her eyes met mine and then she smiled
    i knew exactly what she meant
    and took a rest to sit a while

    opened my mouth no words came out
    she laughed and said..."exactly"
    and we sat there in silence
    and bathed in it's lucidity

    and then i suddenly remembered
    what i'd always known
    we start and end our lives the same
    naked and alone
     
  2. lucyinthesky

    lucyinthesky Tie Dyed Soul

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    i love this
     
  3. octofryed

    octofryed Member

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    wow... thanks a lot. your reply makes me really glad that i posted it.

    namaste,

    doug
     
  4. Moonjava

    Moonjava Senior Member

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    Wow, such a powerful ending!!
    I have a patchwork dress.....lol
    Anyways, I loved this.
    Keep sharing!!!
     
  5. lucyinthesky

    lucyinthesky Tie Dyed Soul

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    hey man, no problem. I really love the last part. It was really striking! Keep it up! It rocks. Makes me wanna be the patchwork girl! :&
     
  6. roly

    roly Senior Member

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    so clever...excellently written...wow!
    roly.xxx
     
  7. Musikero

    Musikero Lifetime Supporter Lifetime Supporter

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    I love it I love it I love it! :)
     
  8. skyfire

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    that was my favorite part...
     
  9. bluefairy

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    wow! that was an amazing poem. keep up the good work and post some more!

    ~desireƩ~
     
  10. octofryed

    octofryed Member

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    thanks for all the compliments... anybody that likes my poems (or doesn't like them) should take a minute and fill out my survey under the smoke signals forum.


    namaste,
    doug
     
  11. SunFree

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    I also love this whole poem :)

    "through my wallet down a wishing well."
     
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