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a touch of imortality

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by steffan, Sep 21, 2005.

  1. steffan

    steffan puffin

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    I gaze at the moonless sky and think of light eternal
    Distant points of shining embers fuel my musing
    The closest of them still impossibly far
    there light I now see was born when I was a child

    Some no longer are, there time spent before the birth of man
    What great and wise civilizations have arisen since there glow began it s journey to me
    Is the flame of there cities intermingled with the glow of those distant suns
    Only reaching me now, long after they have returned to dust


    And what of our light? Were does it go?
    When I turn off the light in the middle of the night and it fades outside my window
    Do the campfires of my youth still burn across that night sky?
    Will someday some far off wonderer gaze at the star that once warmed my face
    And find it just that much brighter

    P.S.
    I have been trying to write this for years, I'm still not at all happy with it but i think i am getting closer
     
  2. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

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    Wow, well done. I found your sharing very beautiful.
     
  3. steffan

    steffan puffin

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    you think so? I thought it kinda bit, but the fact that light never stops unless it gets sucked up in a blackhole fasinates me. very time we make a light we add it the universe yaknow?
     
  4. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

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    Ah, and when light enters a black hole does it come out the other side
    to brighen another Universe :) We are love and light when we relax
    into our essence and allow ourself to be present in harmony with
    All that is.
     
  5. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    I really like this rendition.
     
  6. steffan

    steffan puffin

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    thanks, if i keep it up maybe someday it will be in meter and ryme :)
     
  7. mariecstasy

    mariecstasy Enchanted

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    steffan, this is most excellent....i esp like the last stanza....

    and sylvan...i dig your thoughts too of the light gettin sucked up and lightin on another universe....why not?
     
  8. steffan

    steffan puffin

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    actualy Marie that is only stanza to have survived from conception, the first one was too abscure though and the content was so important to me a keep rewriting it..
    thanks sweety
     
  9. celeritea

    celeritea Member

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    eternal musing, impossibly far
    i was a child
    the birth of man
    journey to me
    those distant suns
    returned to dust

    light? go?
    my window
    night sky
    my face
    much brighter
    a long time
    i think i am getting closer

    :)
     
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