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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by smilefriends, Jul 5, 2005.

  1. smilefriends

    smilefriends Member

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    cosmic rythms flow down blue ice
    storms of song marching down the wind
    the bright sky lowers to the people

    thousands of memories flash-an instant of no pain
    the dance of one people
    has the power to heal the world

    a journey past all false organs
    into one true and mighty soul
    transporting grooves unto the sea
    lifting life into spirit
    with magic as its exuse

    and there was love in the air.
     
  2. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    Beautiful. I liked the first stanza the best; the image of "storms of song marching down the wind" is killer. :)
     
  3. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    most impressive! great job at working the vibe with this one... I enjoyed mucho :)
     
  4. smilefriends

    smilefriends Member

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    thanks a bunch you guys, im just starting to write and that was my first poem. Thanks for being so kind :)
     
  5. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    I wish my first poem had been this good, haha.
     
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