River waltz

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by EmbraceInnerPeaches, Jun 23, 2005.

  1. EmbraceInnerPeaches

    EmbraceInnerPeaches Member

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    Swiftly waltzing across the rocks...
    It lurks… in mysterious ways… it talks… it stalks….
    It numbs your brain from all of the pain you know you have felt….
    It speaks in tones of a tambourine gently kissing your ear
    I want someone to whisper to me like that
    To hear their voice … saying they love me ....every second of the day.... to be there to hold me like a gentle current in the river of my dreams.…
    holding my hands and dancing….
    Dancing beneath the sky…..
    dancing in a tune of where everyone is high….
    Masquerades and razor blades... You can see them in his eye…..
    dancing in the tune of a stormy love stricken sky….
    I crawl up into the trees and stare at the wondering moon…
    its waltzing across in the middle of a star struck ocean of colors…..
    I tried to swim the river….. I tried to swim it all….
    I fell into the rocks and got stuck in the rivers eye…..
    I looked at her in the face… …. I took her hand and swam the land….
    And my hair was made of hands crawling all around me……
    hands of swift…. Hands of kind…. Hands that grabbed my behind….my back… my shoulders…. My legs so thin…..
    she saved me from a death within…..
    She saved me from the mixed emotions…..
    she saved me from the sun…..
    she saved me from lightning….
    She saved me from a gun…..
    now she lay beside of me….
    And we are both forgetting the sea……
    the sea of mad…. The sea of hate…..
    now we lay with peace within us
     
  2. Lozi

    Lozi Senior Member

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    wow! awesome collection of words there peaches! i like the whole way you've woven this into a marvellous poem! it's quite...intoxicatingly good!
     
  3. Necronizer

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    Quiet Impressive good poem i think you should not look for love just love your self and wait....
     
  4. hippychrome

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    Whoa, very deep.. I like it loads and am glad about the peaceful ending and not anymore hate :)
     
  5. Firebelle

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    'It speaks in tones of a tambourine gently kissing your ear'

    I love that :)
     
  6. Hippievixen

    Hippievixen Lifetime Supporter Lifetime Supporter

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    fantastic imagery :)
     
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