Day...

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Spyder, Jun 22, 2004.

  1. Spyder

    Spyder La dah de dah

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    This is generally about my angst at having writters block for about three weeks whilst having all my ideas on paper for a poem that i've been working on for about a month, and not being able to make a start writting it, because i just cant penetrate it! anyway...this is called day, its also influenced by the work of Heiter Villa-Lobos classical composer and latin american classical guitarist. its kept me going this week. It reminds me the 1950's i wrote it with that in mind...

    anyway, all comment good and bad is always welcome. im unsure about the finishing of it, but it can be worked on

    Day

    The skylark gave no call

    No glance into the abyss

    No aching change

    No call to sepia soaked dew.

    The Morning light shines no expression

    No dazed vision

    No skylark tune

    No Latin upheaval.

    And only the evening

    Rejoices in the death of day.
     
  2. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    I actually really liked the ending...it's a bit wistful. Nice work.
     
  3. Spyder

    Spyder La dah de dah

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    thanks kitten! :) its lovely to have a speedy response on here too!
     
  4. tripRBYday

    tripRBYday Member

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    the two lines that rhymed spice this poem up oober amounts. I like it.
     
  5. Fierce_Flawless

    Fierce_Flawless Hip Forums Supporter HipForums Supporter

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    sepia soaked dew... i like it!
     
  6. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    Spyder, cool sig pic...
     
  7. littleskinny

    littleskinny Member

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    Spyder yet again this oozes cool and I love it's gentle, mocking charm! Big thumbs up!
     
  8. littleskinny

    littleskinny Member

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    oops posted twice. Muppet.

    *walks round, whistles*
     
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