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AMAZING PORN!!!!! not really, i just want you to read

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by jamesphoenix2, Jun 10, 2005.

  1. jamesphoenix2

    jamesphoenix2 Member

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    Sicily Fading

    I dreamt of a night now fading
    spent beneath clear sicilian sky
    against a cypress wet with dew
    Recollected memories of days
    spent playing tag in rows of olive trees
    falling into each other arms open
    and rolling in pastures beneath the moon
    Love was born and we nurtured it
    with sweet white wine and mysticated nights
    That dress, her skin, cascading cedar ringlets
    How the light played in her eyes, I will never forget
    I sit back now lost in thought

    And light another cigarette
     
  2. marquis_de_odde

    marquis_de_odde Member

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    The imagery of that is exquisite,truly romantic.
     
  3. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    Wow, this is beautiful. I'm not sure you need the last two lines,though, they seem to take away from the rest of the poem. And I think "open arms" flows better than "arms open" but that's must me.
     
  4. jamesphoenix2

    jamesphoenix2 Member

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    thank you both very much. i was trying to emphasize the nostalgia with the last two lines, and the fact that the entire poem is just a memory. i was also trying to bring the poem back to reality with the last lines, to kind of show that sometimes the best memories hurt the most.
     
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