Pissants

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by novarys, May 31, 2005.

  1. novarys

    novarys Hip Forums Supporter HipForums Supporter

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    I wrote this the other day when a lady at worked told me to grow some balls. I found what she said to be humorous so I wrote this poem. If only she knew....;)




    Intro:
    They call us pissants,
    thats the ironic thing
    when a pissant gets pissed
    their words tend to sting.



    PISSANTS

    The other day this lady said,
    "Girl, you need to grow some balls
    quit being one of those pissants
    getting beat on in the halls"

    I looked at her
    and kinda frowned;
    looked her right in the eyes
    said, "Excuse me ma'am
    but I don't recall,
    askin for your advice.

    So I dont need
    your sympathy
    and if I did
    you'd hear from me.

    So kindly please, take your words
    and shove them up your ass;
    I dont want you to talk to me
    unless I come to ask. "

    Well I knew this lady
    wasn't ready,
    for what I had declared;
    Cos, she shut her trap
    and got real quiet
    and pretended that she cared.

    "My, my i'm so sorry
    I guess I pinned you wrong.
    I never guessed,
    with your quietness
    your mind would'a been so strong"

    With that said,
    I turned away
    and walked outta her sight
    but not before I flipped her off
    leaving her mortified.
     
  2. loveflower

    loveflower Senior Member

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    i LOVE it :D
     
  3. Keramptha

    Keramptha Senior Member

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  4. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    haha, great stuff. the only thing is the last line throws off the rhythm. In my mind, saying "and left her feeling mortified" flows better. Just my $.02
     
  5. novarys

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    thanks for the input.
    i will note it down:)
     
  6. "†"»AMBER«

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    LoL thats a neat poem!!
     
  7. novarys

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    :p thanks
     
  8. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    Woo that rocked! Made me chuckle too! LOVED it.
     
  9. novarys

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    woo! hey thanks!:)
     
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