Bad Weather Blues

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by gdhmomchild, May 28, 2005.

  1. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    Rain, rain
    and more rain.
    Won't wash away my cares or woes
    Ain't done a thing to cleanse my soul
    Just gives me the blues and lets me go
    to more rain,
    rain rain.
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    I know this needs another stanza, but it won't come right now and I guess I wanted to know if it's worth the effort first too. Imma scream if it doesn't stop raining for at least a few days!
     
  2. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    Heh, this could be a great -blues- song, though thematically overused, your personal touches make it special.
     
  3. saffronfrancisburnet

    saffronfrancisburnet Member

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    great picture
    your words....

    my mind feels like this today
    like the rain it passes....

    lovenpeace from saff
     
  4. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    ty~*
    I hadda get it out, lol, cause if I don't get a huge dose of sunshine soon I think Imma grow mold!!
     
  5. Moonjava

    Moonjava Senior Member

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    The weather has been cloudy for 3 days in my nick of the woods. I'm ready to see that sunshine peek out as well! greatpoem!

    luv mj
     
  6. Bhaskar

    Bhaskar Members

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    Nice tits:p
     
  7. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    Bhaskaridgit....
    ...this post is my poem, not my frigging tits! At least you changed the phrasology. Goofball!! :p
     
  8. Bhaskar

    Bhaskar Members

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    Don't blame me lady! You're the flasher here!
     
  9. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    ....not here....pfft! b-have b-ness lolol
     
  10. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

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    Evocative, I could feel the silence between the raindrops.
     
  11. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    It was raining the entire 12 hour trip I had yesterday, so I feel ya (memorial day traffic, atlanta, and torrential downpours are not ingredients in happiness)! I do think it needs another stanza, an elaborative emotional touch or something, but it'll come when it comes... :)
     
  12. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    ty~*
    Yeah, I just didnt know if it was worth the effort or not.
    LOL Sylvan, all I could do when I wrote that was look out and hear drip..drip..drip..
    Some sun finally today. Hope it lasts. When I read it now tho...I have that basic blues riff going thru my my mind *giggles!* duh, duh duh duh DUH! LOL
     
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